Application Letter Critique

Blk 200 Compassvale Way
#12-808

Singapore 540000
+65 96744907
panshiying@gmail.com

12^th September 2012

The Human Resource Department
Management Development Institute of Singapore
MDIS Campus
501 Stirling Road

Singapore 148951

Dear Sir/Madam, 

I am writing to apply for the post of Full-Time Teacher in MDIS, which was advertised in JobsDB website on 11^th September 2012. 

My working experiences as Customer service officer at Inland Revenue Authority of Singapore and after-school-care teacher at Maris Stella Primary School have honed my communication and interpersonal skills with people. Furthermore, I was part of organising committee in the junior college and university orientation camps and this had improved my ability to lead and to work in a team environment as an orientation group leader.

During my summer internship as a research analyst at Frost & Sullivan, I was involved in various types of research projects with a research team which had provided me with a strong base of research and analytic skills. 

I am currently an undergraduate at National University of Singapore majoring in Bachelor of Engineering (Bioengineering) and will be graduating in 2013. I studied subjects which are relevant to the requirements of this post which are Human Resource Management as well as Professional Communications. Moreover, being a private secondary school tutor since 2008 had sharpened my desire to continue in this field and I believe it also helped me to develop the skills I need to be as an effective teacher.

Working for MDIS appeals to me because I believe it has the ideal culture in which I can pursue my passion as an educator and contribute to MDIS’s outstanding record as an institute. I believe my strong working experience and passion in teaching will make me a very competitive candidate for this position.  

Please look through the attached resume for additional information on my experience and I look forward to speaking with you about this employment opportunity. 

Thank you for your time and consideration. 

Yours Faithfully,

Pan Shiying